This is a good piece, Kay. It “fragments” nicely. Reminds me a bit (in style, anyway) of Thomas McGuane’s “Panama.” Throwing a lot of pieces out there, then pulling them together, making it all coherent again, to me, is high art. You’re also one of the few writers who knows to stay “short” on imagery. Whenever I’m editing here, I have to keep telling people to cut the descriptives. “We get it,” I keep saying, especially when I see, “he answered sarcastically.” If you don’t know he’s being sarcastic from his words, descriptives don’t help. You’re the person at a party saying, “It’s a joke!” Anyway, liked this. Good job.

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I did a poor imitation of Don Draper for 40 years before writing my first novel. I'm currently in the final stages of a children's book. Lucky me.

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